I’ve put the revised scene up on Wattpad. I’ll be adding more scenes throughout the week as I revise. Here’s the link:
One of the things I learned? I cannot put a true rough draft of anything on display. I’m not good enough for that, and it makes me cringe. So, I’m putting the revised version out there instead. Still not perfect, but I think it reads better, and I feel better about showing it to the public.